Here is page 11. This was originally page 8 (I think) in the original first issue. I trimmed some of the dialogue back. Like a lot of new writers, I had way to much dialogue on the page. Working with a writer on 2 and 3 taught me that pictures are more effective at telling a story if we let them. I also tried to make each panel different. Different angle, different composition, or a different type of shot. I used to black out the gutters, but I have since abandoned that approach.